help!?

[vasquez1234]

Potrebno mi je da neko pregleda ispravnost ovog sastava, pa ako neko zna engleski i dobre je volje da vidi da li je ovo gramatički ispravno? Unaprijed hvala!
When millions of young people leave school, they begin an independent life. Some of them start working, go into business, but some of them continue schooling to receive a higher education.
I often wonder about my future as I am about to finish secondary school. The first question on my mind is which profession should I choose? It is very hard to make any definite choices, because I know they will affect me for the rest of my life. I want a profession that will satisfy me, challenge me, and bring me joy. The first I have to do is to finish secondary school. At present I go to secondary school and I am the third class. Now, I must have good marks in school. That is very important for my admission to college. I would like to enroll faculty of Transport and Communications. After faculty, I hope to find real job of my profession. But, until than, I must acquire new knowledge, because it's only real way to have best future.

[miki27A]

Ja bih ovo nazvala paragrafom, a ne sastavom, ali hajde. Izmjene su boldirane.

Potrebno mi je da neko pregleda ispravnost ovog sastava, pa ako neko zna engleski i dobre je volje da vidi da li je ovo gramatički ispravno? Unaprijed hvala!
When millions of young people leave school, they begin an independent life. Some of them start working, go into business, but some of them continue with school to receive higher education.
I often wonder about my future as I am about to finish high school. The first question on my mind is which profession should I choose? It is very hard to make any definite choices, because I know they will affect me for the rest of my life. I want a profession that will satisfy me, challenge me, and bring me joy. The first thing I have to do is to finish high school. At present I go to high school and I am junior. Now, I must have good grades in school. That is very important for my admission to college. I would like to enroll in Faculty of Transport and Communications. After finishingFaculty, I hope to find real job of my profession. But until then, I must acquire new knowledge, because it's only real way to have best future.

Prva recenica: na koju school mislis: srednju, zar ne? Srednja skola je high school.
Ti hoces na saobracajni fax? Kad napises faculty malim slovom onda se misli na profesora, a fakultet se pise velikim slovom. Samo kod nas ima to fakultet. Svugdje je Univerzitet taj i taj, skola ta i ta ili odsjek (Department) taj i taj.
Dobro nauci razliku izmedju than i then (velika je).

[doboj71]

At present,i am going to secondary school and i am at( treci razred) third year.Also i must have a good marks in shool.
I would like to enroll at transport and communication college.

after college,i hope to find real job in my profession.But until then, i must acquire new knowledge,because that is best way to have brighter future.

[Sunculish]

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It is very hard to make any definite choices, because I know they will affect me for the rest of my life.

Mislim da ovo trebaš da napišeš u jednini, ovako: It is very hard to make any definite choice, because I know it will affect me for the rest of my life.

At present I go to secondary school and I am the third class.

Ovdje se slažem sa high school, ali bih umjesto "I am the third class" napisala I am a third grade, ili at third year, kako je već napisano u jednom od komentara gore.

because it's only real way to have best future.

Mislim da ti ovdje fali član

[MiMi2_34]

Zna li iko kako da objavim svoj post

[vasquez1234]

Prva recenica: na koju school mislis: srednju, zar ne? Srednja skola je high school.
Ti hoces na saobracajni fax? Kad napises faculty malim slovom onda se misli na profesora, a fakultet se pise velikim slovom. Samo kod nas ima to fakultet. Svugdje je Univerzitet taj i taj, skola ta i ta ili odsjek (Department) taj i taj.
Dobro nauci razliku izmedju than i then (velika je).

Da, na srednju sam mislio.
Ispravio sam greške. Hvala puno.